Category: Writers Block
This is my first attempt at a first person narritave. It is a pokemon story and the main character is mew.
I might have a secual i don't know.
I’m Not the Only One
It was raining harder than I had ever seen. I watched the heavy drops fall from the inside of my little cave. It was a reflection of my mood: sad, depressed and lonely. The raging storm out side seemed to call to my soul. It isn’t easy to be the only one of my kind.
My pink fur drooped and my blue eyes seemed dead to the world. I never grew bored of watching over the forest I called my home. I never looked into myself to find what was calling out to me. “You’re not the only one,” it seemed to say.
Of course I was alone. I never had reason to believe otherwise. That was what I thought until I saw a solitary pink feline fly across the sky, just barely visible because of the rain. She probably has the same thoughts as me.
I was curious to see if my eyes were playing tricks on me which they never did but this was just too absurd. “I’m the only Mew. There can’t be another, but what if that is another.”
I now know that there is another mew besides me. That is probably one of the most gratifying feelings ever. Meeting in a storm and knowing that you aren’t alone and that someone out there is sharing your pain. Many people believe me to be genderless but I am female and so is my new found partner. A Mew couple is definitely absurd but there are bound to be many things as absurd to come.
um, ok, i have to say that this was indeed, an interesting story. There's not many people who write about Poke'mon. but, it was well enough.
lol, do you have a thing for Evanescence, the band? lol, first you write a poem by that name, and now this, which is a line from one of their songs, the only one. lol
Christ that was constructive dont set yourself up as a critic will you eh?. Sweet for your 1st go it's good and you can only improve and develop your writing style, by continuing the story, so keep at it.You could perhaps describe your cave and the ferocity of the storm to bring flesh to the bones of this story. Great to see someone having a shot at the hardest art.
I agree with Goblin. As a first story this is good.
Hope to see a second and third ...
Thanks,
Bob
I might do another one but I'm not sure. The song Evanescence is not related to the band it is more like someone's life vanishing. I do admit that I like the band alot though.
The 1st is the most difficult but a blank screen is infinately more frightening.
it should be published.
lol
it's not that good. I'm my worst critic
Self doubt is the curse of the creative, it's up to you to beat it.
It doesn't want to be beaten though!!! I have four other stories to finish but no inspration to write them and three other stories that are beging to be written but no ideas!!
I read your story and I have to say, I liked it a lot. Keep up the good work, smile. This story made me smile when I read it.